英文レポートの添削をお願いしたいです。よろしくお願いいたします。
I am studying the Buddhism at a correspondence college.
This is because I am looking at the Buddhism and I realized it is deeply rooted in Japanese life. It is pleasant to study a background of the everyday behavior becoming the custom. And, The teaching of the Buddhism cheers up the hard things, tells how I should live.
To acquire knowledge of Buddhism means my life will be worth more than now.
In addition, When I get old and can enjoy that I go and worship in a temple and a shrine of the neighborhood instead of travel oversea. even if I came to lack physical strength . Study of the Buddhism is a hobby not only religion, but also can continued for a long time.
And, I expect it in leading to the activation of the brain by studying.
I also learn English and the philosophy and more at a acorrespondence college.It has difficult them, but tells pleasure of learning what I do not know.I want to continue studying for life even if I graduate from a university.
回答
添削は、この英語の質問箱では期待しないほうがいいです。有料のサービスを利用すれば、正しい英語を学べます。添削は、訂正箇所の説明を加えるとなると、時間がかかるもので、有料になるのは仕方がありません。私も無料ではできません。
説明はしませんが、訂正しましたので、参考にしてください。
I’m studying Buddhism at a distance learning college.
This is because, as I learn Buddhism, I realize that it has taken deep roots in Japanese culture. It is delightful to learn the background of our everyday actions and how our customs were formed. Buddhist teachings also cheer me up, help me overcome difficulties, and tell me how I should live. Buddhist knowledge makes my life more valuable than before.
When I get old and lose my physical strength, I will be able to enjoy visiting and worshipping at temples and shrines in my neighborhood instead of traveling overseas. Studying Buddhism is a leisurely pursuit, not only a religious one, and can be continued for a very long time. Moreover, I believe that it leads to the activation of unutilized parts of the brain.
I also learn English, philosophy, and other subjects at my distance learning college. They are difficult subjects, but they give me a pleasure of noticing what I do not know. I want to continue studying after graduation and to keep learning for life.
冒頭部分だけしか見れていませんが
Buddhism 普通は the はつけない と認識しています。
Wiki 参照
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Buddhism
looking at 仏教を見る 意味がわかりません looking up でしょうか
teaching 授業 教えるという動作 とかの意味になり 普通 宗教の教えは teachings 複数形と思います。主語が 複数なので それに応じて 動詞も 変化。
一語一語 英和辞典で 意味を確認していく必要があると 思います 。教えは teaching でいいか teachings か など
もちろん 翻訳アプリ使えば すぐにほぼ正しい英文はできますが 能力向上にはなりませんね
This is not a piece of advice to you I'm talking to myself for my practice of writing skills.
At first I'll apologize that I'm an English learner and not eligible to revise your report.You should ask Kevin-san's help ( Kevin@MusicoLingo.com ). please post your question to this address. only if you would assess my revising, I'd try to revise over and over again, if you'd find any unclear/unnatural/strange point, please re-post it to this section. I've not yet grasped your intention of the sentence enough. At least after three times revising we'd complete it.
I've been studying the Buddhism at a correspondence college (for almost half a year). Why I'm studying Buddhism is because I've realized that Buddhism is deeply rooted in Japanese life during I'm learning it. I'm pleasant to study the background of the everyday behavior becoming my habit. And the learning of the Buddhism cheers me up, the hard thing would tell me how I should live. The Buddhism would lead me to the life more worthy than now. In addition when I get older, then I can enjoy that I'd go and worship in a temple/shrine in my neighborhood in stead of traveling overseas. Even if I've lost my physical strength. Study of the Buddhism is a religious habit and I can continue studying in my life. I expect it'd lead me to the activation of my brain by studying. I also learn English and the philosophy and more at a correspondence college. Those might be difficult for me, but I'd feel pleasure of learning what I don't know. I'd like to continue studying in my life even if i'd graduate from the college.