英作文
まず、人工過剰について人々の関心は近年増している。人工過剰についての議論が世界各国で討論されている。討論がされていること自体がその問題がいかに重要？かどうかを示している
First, people's interest in overpopulation has grown significantly over the last few years.
Currently, the topic is being actively discussed in each country and the fact itself may be show how important the problem is.
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回答
First, people's interest in overpopulation has grown significantly over the last few years.
--->>> First, people's concern about overpopulation has significantly grown over the last few years.
Currently, the topic is being actively discussed in each country and the fact itself may be show how important the problem is.
--->>> Currently, this issue has been under active discussion worldwide, a fact which illustrates how grave the problem is.
最後の方はもう少し工夫が必要かも知れません。