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＜本文＞
I think my perfect travel destination is Oshima Island. I have a few reasons for that. Firstly, the scenery is beautiful. The ocean from there is blue, clear, and very beautiful. Also, as you drive along the mountain road, you can see a beautiful cross-section of the strata. Secondly, there is a long history there. What started out as a small mountain repeatedly erupted over a long period of time, and the lava that flowed during the eruptions created a large island. Thirdly, there are many special products there. The area is famous for its camellias, and the oil from camellias is used to make cooking oil and cosmetics, which are the local specialty products. Other famous products include salt made from the seawater there and milk crackers made with plenty of milk from the area. For the following reasons, my favorite destination is Oshima Island.